WIPpet Wednesday

Yep – I missed the past couple of weeks of WIPpet Wednesdays.  I don’t know about you, but the holidays can really be timesuckers for me, and I was committed to posting something today.  Over the next two weeks, I’ll be lucky to get a couple of book reviews posted because we’ll be traveling the loop from KY to WV, down to SC, then back to KY, visiting family for Christmas.

So today’s WIPpet is from a short story I wrote, entitled Behavior Management.  My math is 1+2 = page 3, the first 17 lines.

“Sir, I honestly have no idea what this is about.” 

He cocked his head to one side, a half smile crossing his face.  “I’ve been commander of this sector, and many others, for decades.  Much longer than your seventeen years, Jude.  I find it insulting you think me unaware of your efforts at an uprising.”

My heart was pounding, palms sweaty.  “I don’t…”

“Stop,” he said, his command echoing like thunder in the room.  The half smile I’d probably imagined was gone, his dark eyes incendiary.  “There are people under my command whose sole purpose is to gather information so that I’m always aware of what’s happening in my sectors.  Contrary to what you may believe, Jude, someone is always watching.”

He knew.  Though our group wasn’t large, we were committed to our beliefs.  Dropping all pretense of innocence, I didn’t want to go down without a fight. 

“You don’t treat us like humans!  Scientists experiment on us like lab rats, injecting us with animal DNA and forcing people to procreate for the optimal gene pool.  Children are taken from their families and put in military training! “

That’s it for me for a couple of weeks – Merry Christmas and Happy Holidays!


13 thoughts on “WIPpet Wednesday

  1. Wow. You’ve created a very interesting world in just a few short paragraphs. Great job! I do believe an uprising would be interesting to watch/read about. =P looking forward to more, hopefully.


  2. kathils

    Oooh, very interesting. You’ve really got a good set-up here, with lots of internal tension going on. And it leaves lots of questions to be answered. I love this line, “The half smile I’d probably imagined was gone, his dark eyes incendiary.”


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